Common mistake
Saying government should invest without public benefit or cost trade-off weakens the argument.
Break the Task 2 topic into command words, subjects, actors, example scope, and scoreable body development first. The focus is not memorising one universal example.
Topic pages should narrow the thinking space, not generate a whole model essay for you.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
Saying government should invest without public benefit or cost trade-off weakens the argument.
Stronger government paragraphs often include taxpayer, public benefit, market failure, or opportunity cost.
Clarify government action, beneficiary group, funding source, and alternative choice first.
Add public benefit and trade-off to one government spending claim.
Break the Task 2 topic into command words, subjects, actors, example scope, and scoreable body development first. The focus is not memorising one universal example.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit the prompt and essay, inspect prompt analysis, position, body development, examples, and scoring criteria first, then decide whether to add ideas, replace examples, or rewrite a paragraph.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.