Diagnostic evidence
If the conclusion says both should be banned and sometimes necessary, the condition for the position is unclear.
This question easily writes animals suffer on one side and medicine saves lives on the other. The key is under what conditions you think it is acceptable or unacceptable.
Condition statements support the position better than emotional wording.
Only saying it is cruel is not enough; explain whether there is medical necessity or an alternative method.
Add one condition sentence to each body paragraph showing how it limits or supports the final answer.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
If the conclusion says both should be banned and sometimes necessary, the condition for the position is unclear.
Write acceptable only if, unacceptable because, or replaceable when. Give the position a condition.
This question easily writes animals suffer on one side and medicine saves lives on the other. The key is under what conditions you think it is acceptable or unacceptable.
Only saying it is cruel is not enough; explain whether there is medical necessity or an alternative method.
Add one condition sentence to each body paragraph showing how it limits or supports the final answer. Write acceptable only if, unacceptable because, or replaceable when. Give the position a condition.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit one animal-testing essay and find the main issue in ethics, example, or position.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.