Common mistake
A topic sentence that is too broad gives examples nowhere to land; too narrow cannot support a paragraph.
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the rewrite becomes.
Make the problem smaller first so the rewrite can actually focus.
A topic sentence that is too broad gives examples nowhere to land; too narrow cannot support a paragraph.
If the topic sentence only repeats the topic without a judgement word, the paragraph is hard to develop.
Write subject, judgement, and reason direction before examples.
Turn a vague topic sentence into a provable one, then add one because clause.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit the prompt and essay, find the criterion that most affects the score, then decide which paragraph to rewrite.