Common mistake
Memorised materials can turn a paragraph into a story instead of an argument.
Writing problem breakdown
Reasons and examples should form one proof chain.
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the revision becomes.
Make the problem smaller first so revision can actually focus.
Real IELTS essay diagnosis
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Main blocker
Body paragraph role is unclear
6–7conservative band range
268 words
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
Diagnostic evidence
If the claim is not weakened after removing the example, the example is not proving anything.
What to confirm before writing
Write the reason first, then choose a concrete situation that demonstrates it.
What to revise in the next version
Turn one generic example into a concrete situation and add one so what sentence back to the claim.
- Whether the reason explains the claim
- Whether the example is specific
- Whether linkage back exists
FAQ
What problem does Task 2 reasons and examples solve?
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the revision becomes.
Is Task 2 reasons and examples an AI essay checker?
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing guides
按正在写的题目查找雅思写作指南：小作文图型、overview 与数据取舍，大作文题型、立场与主体段展开，以及批改后的同题重写步骤。每篇指南都要求你回到自己的作文验证一个具体改动。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Chinese writing correction
雅思写作批改不应只改语法、替换高级词或给一篇标准范文。先基于完整题目与原文，判断 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响目标分的主卡分点，引用对应句段，再把反馈收窄成下一版可验证的段落重写目标。学习者自己完成修改，才能判断证据是否改善并迁移到下一篇
Chinese band descriptors
雅思写作评分标准包括 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 和 Grammar。重写时要先找主卡分点。
Task 2 examples
Task 2 的例子要和 claim、reason、consequence 连在一起，才能支撑论证。
Chinese Task 2 examples
雅思大作文例子要连接 reason 和 consequence，避免只列名人、国家或个人经历。
Education thin development
一个 IELTS Task 2 education 常见写作问题：不提供范文代写，只展示主卡分点、证据和下一版修改目标。
Task 2 sample essay
雅思大作文范文要重点分析立场稳定、主体段展开和例子如何支撑观点。
Task 2 sample essay analysis
雅思大作文范文分析不该停在高级词和漂亮句型。先检查 thesis、topic sentence、reason、example 与 consequence 是否形成完整链条，并观察每段怎样回应命令词和稳定立场。再用范文的结构证据反查自己的提纲与作文，定位最薄弱的审题或展开步骤，完成一次自己的段落重写。
Chinese sample essay problem
雅思大作文范文可以帮助理解结构，但照搬会掩盖自己的主卡分点。先用范文反查论证步骤。
Start diagnosis
Use one real essay to find the main blocker.
Submit the prompt and essay, find the criterion that most affects the score, then decide which paragraph to rewrite.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
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