Common mistake
Listing many ideas with one sentence each leaves body paragraphs shallow.
- Whether the idea is relevant
- Whether it can explain a reason
- Whether it has a concrete example
Turn topics, samples, materials, or prediction prompts into task reading, development, examples, and revision steps first. The goal is not memorising answers; it is writing your own next version.
A topic page is useful when it helps you write your own next version.
If an idea cannot be followed by because, it is not yet developable.
Choose the most provable and prompt-relevant idea, not the most impressive one.
Turn one idea into a full paragraph using claim-because-example-so what.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
Listing many ideas with one sentence each leaves body paragraphs shallow.
Turn topics, samples, materials, or prediction prompts into task reading, development, examples, and revision steps first. The goal is not memorising answers; it is writing your own next version.
If an idea cannot be followed by because, it is not yet developable.
Choose the most provable and prompt-relevant idea, not the most impressive one. Listing many ideas with one sentence each leaves body paragraphs shallow.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Put the prompt and essay into assessment and first check whether the topic material truly supports your point.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.