Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Common writing problem
AI will replace all jobs, so governments must stop AI.
This draft type may seem to have ideas while lacking diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Draft risk
The issue is not a strong position; all jobs and stop AI are too absolute, with no occupation difference or policy feasibility.
Revision target
Change it to one group: how routine office workers are affected and which part retraining can repair.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the sentence that most affects meaning into a provable cause-effect, comparison, or trade-off chain.
- Replace all jobs with a specific worker group
- Replace stopping technology with managing transition
- Add one skill-change causal chain
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Technology topic
IELTS Task 2 technology topic 容易写成泛泛的 modern life。先诊断立场、对象和例子是否贴题。用自己的原文逐项检查，并把结论变成一次具体重写。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
AI and jobs
AI 和就业题要诊断 job replacement、new skills、business efficiency 和 worker protection。
Work topic
IELTS Task 2 work topic 常见风险是把 remote work、job security、work-life balance 都写成泛泛效率。先诊断对象和因果。
Climate responsibility blur
示范 climate change essay 为什么 government 和 individuals 混写会削弱 Task Response。
Crime generic solution
一个 IELTS Task 2 crime 常见写作问题：不写范文，展示 solution 太泛时的证据和重写目标。这是一类常见写作问题的示例，供学习参考；雅思成绩以官方为准。
Discussion one-sided
Discussion essay one-sided 示例诊断 both views 没有公平解释、个人观点突然出现的问题。带着自己的原文逐项检查，再用一次有目标的重写验证判断。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
References