Risk: only writing media affects people
This claim is too broad because it does not show whether media changes consumption, opinion, learning, or voting.
Media prompts may ask about news, advertising, social media, celebrity, or misinformation. Each has a different influence path.
The more specific the audience, the stronger the development.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
This claim is too broad because it does not show whether media changes consumption, opinion, learning, or voting.
Without teenagers, voters, consumers, or parents, the example usually becomes generic.
Write source, audience, message, and behaviour change first. Missing one element often makes the paragraph jump.
Replace people with one specific audience and add one sentence explaining why that audience is influenced.
Media prompts may ask about news, advertising, social media, celebrity, or misinformation. Each has a different influence path.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit one media-topic essay and find the main issue in audience, examples, or development.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.