Common mismatch
The first paragraph may discuss lack of education, while the second only says government funding. Missing a mechanism, the solution feels like another topic.
Many essays describe a broad problem but give a generic solution. The reader needs to see why the solution addresses that specific problem.
Problems and solutions should appear as matched pairs.
The problem cannot be only bad for society; explain who is affected and how.
The solution can be imperfect, but it should show how it reduces the cause or consequence.
The first paragraph may discuss lack of education, while the second only says government funding. Missing a mechanism, the solution feels like another topic.
Add one sentence after each solution beginning because it addresses..., then check whether it truly connects to the problem.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit one Task 2 essay and find the main break in problem, solution, or development.