One diagnosis provides TR, CC, LR, and GRA scores plus character-level essay evidence, then sets an estimated eight-minute, 60–180-word target-paragraph task completed by the learner.
The band range is diagnostic guidance, not an official IELTS score; no score improvement is promised.
The page locks the main blocker, essay location, and public repair focus while the learner retains the actual rewriting action.
The revision uses a five-level before-and-after assessment and preserves before/after evidence so the conclusion remains traceable to the essay.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friends who is far away from us. These things were very difficult in the past, but now everyone can do it easily.
On the one hand, technology has made our daily life much simpler and more convenient in many ways. First of all, it saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friends who are far away from us. These things were very difficult in the past, but now everyone can do them easily.
Body paragraph role is unclear
Make the paragraph’s job clear before moving into its examples.
The blocker clearly moved
The submitted revision successfully added a clear topic sentence at the beginning of the paragraph ('On the one hand, technology has made our daily life much simpler and more convenient in many ways.') that explicitly states the paragraph's role in addressing the first view of the prompt.
The original paragraph began directly with a specific supporting point ('First of all, technology saves a lot of time...') without a broader topic sentence to establish the paragraph's overall role in the essay.
The rewritten paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that outlines the paragraph's purpose, effectively introducing the discussion on how technology makes life simpler and more convenient before providing specific examples.
Submit the real prompt and full essay to receive the four-criterion diagnosis and main blocker.
Complete your own target-paragraph revision focused on the public repair focus, then compare the before/after evidence.
One diagnosis provides TR, CC, LR, and GRA scores plus character-level essay evidence, then sets an estimated eight-minute, 60–180-word target-paragraph task completed by the learner.
The page locks the main blocker, essay location, and public repair focus while the learner retains the actual rewriting action.
The revision uses a five-level before-and-after assessment and preserves before/after evidence so the conclusion remains traceable to the essay. Complete your own target-paragraph revision focused on the public repair focus, then compare the before/after evidence.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit the prompt and essay, find the main blocker first, then decide whether the next version should repair Task 1, Task 2, language control, or paragraph development.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
