Common mistake
Writing one sentence per bar makes the report scattered and hides main differences.
- Whether grouping is clear
- Whether comparison is visible
- Whether figures are representative
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the revision becomes.
Make the problem smaller first so revision can actually focus.
If body paragraphs have no grouping logic, data selection is usually unclear.
Group by category, time, or size difference before selecting representative figures.
Rewrite two body paragraphs, each handling one comparable data group.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
Writing one sentence per bar makes the report scattered and hides main differences.
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the revision becomes.
If body paragraphs have no grouping logic, data selection is usually unclear.
Group by category, time, or size difference before selecting representative figures. Writing one sentence per bar makes the report scattered and hides main differences.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit the prompt and essay, find the criterion that most affects the score, then decide which paragraph to rewrite.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.