Common mistake
Writing one sentence per bar makes the report scattered and hides main differences.
- Whether grouping is clear
- Whether comparison is visible
- Whether figures are representative
Break the problem into one blocker, one piece of diagnostic evidence, and one next revision target first. The smaller the problem, the more focused the rewrite becomes.
Make the problem smaller first so the rewrite can actually focus.
If body paragraphs have no grouping logic, data selection is usually unclear.
Group by category, time, or size difference before selecting representative figures.
Rewrite two body paragraphs, each handling one comparable data group.
Writing one sentence per bar makes the report scattered and hides main differences.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Submit the prompt and essay, find the criterion that most affects the score, then decide which paragraph to rewrite.