The report separates TR, CC, LR, and GRA, then uses essay evidence to choose one main blocker; the target paragraph is rewritten in 60–180 words in about eight minutes.
The band range is diagnostic guidance, not an official IELTS score; no score improvement is promised.
The main blocker, target paragraph, and public repair focus sit in one route, leaving one focused revision to complete.
Rewrite the target paragraph around the published repair focus, then check the before/after summary.
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friends who is far away from us. These things were very difficult in the past, but now everyone can do it easily.
On the one hand, technology has made our daily life much simpler and more convenient in many ways. First of all, it saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friends who are far away from us. These things were very difficult in the past, but now everyone can do them easily.
Body paragraph role is unclear
Make the paragraph’s job clear before moving into its examples.
The blocker clearly moved
The submitted revision successfully added a clear topic sentence at the beginning of the paragraph ('On the one hand, technology has made our daily life much simpler and more convenient in many ways.') that explicitly states the paragraph's role in addressing the first view of the prompt.
The original paragraph began directly with a specific supporting point ('First of all, technology saves a lot of time...') without a broader topic sentence to establish the paragraph's overall role in the essay.
The rewritten paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that outlines the paragraph's purpose, effectively introducing the discussion on how technology makes life simpler and more convenient before providing specific examples.
After the revision, five plain-language outcomes including improved and partly improved explain what changed in the target issue.
Submit the full prompt and essay so the diagnosis can inspect task response, coherence, vocabulary, and grammar together.
The report separates TR, CC, LR, and GRA, then uses essay evidence to choose one main blocker; the target paragraph is rewritten in 60–180 words in about eight minutes.
The main blocker, target paragraph, and public repair focus sit in one route, leaving one focused revision to complete.
Rewrite the target paragraph around the published repair focus, then check the before/after summary. Submit the full prompt and essay so the diagnosis can inspect task response, coherence, vocabulary, and grammar together.
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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