Draft risk
Measures are listed without mechanism: who pays, who changes travel behaviour, and why congestion falls are unclear.
- Keep one actor per solution
- Write the behaviour change
- Replace better with a concrete result
This draft type may seem to have ideas while lacking diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
This is a representative writing problem, not a learner case or an official IELTS score.
Change it into one actor chain: the government raises parking fees and shifts commuters toward more reliable public transport.
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the sentence that most affects meaning into a provable cause-effect, comparison, or trade-off chain.
Measures are listed without mechanism: who pays, who changes travel behaviour, and why congestion falls are unclear.
This draft type may seem to have ideas while lacking diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
Change it into one actor chain: the government raises parking fees and shifts commuters toward more reliable public transport.
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer. Measures are listed without mechanism: who pays, who changes travel behaviour, and why congestion falls are unclear.
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