Next revision target
Rewrite the final line of the introduction, then add one this paragraph proves sentence to Body 1 and Body 2. Repair roles before sentences.
Common writing problem
Position drift in technology essays is often caused by weak paragraph roles, not lack of ideas.
Sample issue: the introduction says automation is beneficial, while the body mainly proves job loss is serious. The diagnosis is that the body paragraphs do not serve one answer.
This is a representative writing problem, not a learner case or an official IELTS score.
Main blocker
Clear position is unstable: each paragraph seems to answer a different question.
Evidence signal
The conclusion turns with however, so the final answer no longer matches the introduction.
What to revise after checking
Rewrite the final sentence of each body paragraph so it returns to the position. If it cannot, the paragraph angle needs to change.
- Whether introduction and conclusion match
- Whether each paragraph has a proof role
- Whether contrast changes the answer
FAQ
What problem does Technology unclear position solve?
Sample issue: the introduction says automation is beneficial, while the body mainly proves job loss is serious. The diagnosis is that the body paragraphs do not serve one answer.
What evidence should I check first for Technology unclear position?
Clear position is unstable: each paragraph seems to answer a different question.
What should I redo after reading Technology unclear position?
The conclusion turns with however, so the final answer no longer matches the introduction. Rewrite the final sentence of each body paragraph so it returns to the position. If it cannot, the paragraph angle needs to change.
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Technology topic
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Technology replacing jobs
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Task 2 position
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Writing checker
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Tourism weak comparison
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Traffic solution no actor
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Transport no mechanism
示范 transport essay 只写政府多投资为什么不够，以及如何补上通勤行为变化。
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