Next revision target
Rewrite the final line of the introduction, then add one this paragraph proves sentence to Body 1 and Body 2. Repair roles before sentences.
Common writing problem
Position drift in technology essays usually comes from weak paragraph roles rather than a shortage of ideas.
Sample issue: the introduction says automation is beneficial, while the body mainly proves job loss is serious. The diagnosis is that the body paragraphs need to serve one answer.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Main blocker
Clear position is unstable: each paragraph seems to answer a different question.
Evidence signal
The conclusion turns with however, so the final answer drifts away from the introduction.
What to revise after checking
Rewrite the final sentence of each body paragraph so it returns to the position. If that is a struggle, the paragraph angle needs to change.
- Whether introduction and conclusion match
- Whether each paragraph has a proof role
- Whether contrast changes the answer
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Technology topic
IELTS Task 2 technology topic 容易写成泛泛的 modern life。先诊断立场、对象和例子是否贴题。用自己的原文逐项检查，并把结论变成一次具体重写。
Technology replacing jobs
Technology replacing jobs 这类 IELTS Task 2 题目常在 efficiency 和 unemployment 之间摇摆。先检查立场和主体段职责。
Task 2 position
IELTS Task 2 清晰立场从开头的同意或反对开始，再让 thesis、topic sentence、主体段理由和 conclusion 持续回答同一问题。通过 agree/disagree、discussion 与双问题题型识别立场漂移、范围过大或让步失控的原文证据，再把问题收窄成一次可检查的开头或段落重写。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Tourism weak comparison
这份 IELTS Task 2 tourism 常见写作问题 展示作文写到 jobs 和 culture loss，却因缺少共同标准而无法判断 benefits 是否超过 drawbacks。查看原文证据、主卡分点和目标段落，学习补上比较尺度、权重与结论，再把方法用于自己的旅游类作文重写；它只是代表性问题说明。
Traffic solution no actor
交通拥堵方案段常列措施但没有主体。先诊断谁执行、如何改变行为、结果是什么。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Transport no mechanism
示范 transport essay 只写政府多投资为什么不够，以及如何补上通勤行为变化。检查重点：服务改善是否具体、通勤者是否改变选择、拥堵结果是否可解释。
Start practising
Check whether your technology-topic position is stable first.
Submit one essay and get one main blocker, one text evidence point, and one revision target.
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