Draft risk
Phones distract children needs content type, duration, and concrete consequence.
- Whether content type is clear
- Whether behaviour change is specific
- Whether consequence returns to the prompt
Common writing problem
When screen-time examples are too vague, the paragraph sounds like parental complaint.
This Task 2 draft type may seem to have ideas while still lacking clear diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Revision target
The revision target is content -> behaviour -> learning or health result.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the sentence that most affects meaning into a provable cause-effect, comparison, or trade-off chain.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Children topic
IELTS Task 2 children topic 常把 children 写得太大。先诊断年龄段、责任主体和行为变化。年龄段决定原因和例子。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Children screen time
儿童屏幕时间题要诊断 education value、attention、health 和 parent responsibility。先做题目诊断，再写完整作文。
Sports weak example
示范 sports essay 为什么健康例子不能自动证明教育或公共资金观点。这不是 Band 9 范文。先看一类 Task 2 草稿为什么卡住，以及下一版应该先修哪一个写作步骤。
Technology unclear position
一个 technology essay 常见写作问题：当文章一边支持效率、一边担心失业时，先找立场和段落职责问题。Clear position 时好时坏：每段都像在回答不同问题。
Tourism weak comparison
这份 IELTS Task 2 tourism 常见写作问题 展示作文写到 jobs 和 culture loss，却因缺少共同标准而无法判断 benefits 是否超过 drawbacks。查看原文证据、主卡分点和目标段落，学习补上比较尺度、权重与结论，再把方法用于自己的旅游类作文重写；它只是代表性问题说明。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
References