Draft risk
The cause-effect chain is too short: it does not explain how advertising affects judgement or handle parents and product type.
- Limit the age group
- Explain persuasion mechanism
- Add the parent role
Common writing problem
Advertising is bad for children because they will want to buy things when they see ads.
This draft type may seem to have ideas while lacking diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Revision target
Change it to a specific chain: snack ads use characters, leading younger children to pressure parents to buy.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the sentence that most affects meaning into a provable cause-effect, comparison, or trade-off chain.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
Home
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Business topic
IELTS Task 2 business topic 常涉及广告、企业责任和消费者选择。先诊断企业、政府和个人边界。先限定角度，再选例子。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Advertising to children ban
儿童广告禁令题要诊断 persuasion、parent responsibility、business freedom 和 health impact。
Children topic
IELTS Task 2 children topic 常把 children 写得太大。先诊断年龄段、责任主体和行为变化。年龄段决定原因和例子。
AI jobs absolute example
AI 就业作文常把技术影响写成绝对替代。先诊断职业群体、技能变化和再培训机制。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Climate responsibility blur
示范 climate change essay 为什么 government 和 individuals 混写会削弱 Task Response。
Crime generic solution
一个 IELTS Task 2 crime 常见写作问题：不写范文，展示 solution 太泛时的证据和重写目标。这是一类常见写作问题的示例，供学习参考；雅思成绩以官方为准。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
References