Risk: the group is too broad
Children should learn responsibility needs to say whether it means primary school children or teenagers.
- Whether age group is clear
- Whether adult responsibility is clear
- Whether behaviour change is specific
Task 2 topic guide
Children-topic essays should make children specific before discussing responsibility.
Children prompts may ask about discipline, screen time, school education, independence, or parents. Without age group, examples become vague.
Age group decides reasons and examples.
Diagnostic evidence: one example fits every child
If the example fits any children prompt, it has not answered the specific age and setting.
How to break down children topics
Write age group, setting, adult role, and expected behaviour first.
What to revise after checking
Replace children with one specific group, then rewrite the reason and example.
Real IELTS essay diagnosis
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Main blocker
Body paragraph role is unclear
6–7conservative band range
268 words
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
FAQ
What problem does Children topic solve?
Children prompts may ask about discipline, screen time, school education, independence, or parents. Without age group, examples become vague.
What evidence should I check first for Children topic?
If the example fits any children prompt, it has not answered the specific age and setting.
What should I redo after reading Children topic?
Write age group, setting, adult role, and expected behaviour first. Children should learn responsibility needs to say whether it means primary school children or teenagers.
Is Children topic an AI essay checker?
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Guides
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Family topic
IELTS Task 2 family topic 常把 parents、children、elderly 写成泛泛关系。先诊断角色、责任和变化。
Social media children
Social media and children 这类 Task 2 题目容易写成泛泛危害。先诊断 age group、platform use 和 consequence 是否清楚。
Task 2 examples
Task 2 的例子要和 claim、reason、consequence 连在一起，才能支撑论证。
Crime topic
IELTS Task 2 crime topic 容易写成 punishment 清单。先诊断原因、责任主体和 solution 机制。
Culture topic
IELTS Task 2 culture topic 容易写成 tradition is important。先诊断文化变化、代际差异和具体例子。
Education topic
IELTS Task 2 education topic 常见问题不是没观点，而是 reason、example 和 consequence 没有连成可评分的论证。
Start diagnosis
Check whether the group is specific in a children essay first.
Submit one children-topic essay and find the main blocker in group definition, responsibility, or examples.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
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