Common risk
A story follows for example, but it does not explain why the story proves the claim.
- Whether the example is specific
- Whether the example proves the claim
- Whether the consequence returns to the prompt
Chinese writing problem diagnosis
When examples are too general, the essay lacks proof relation, not material.
The issue is usually not a missing model essay; it is not yet seeing why your own essay keeps being called unclear.
Use essay evidence to choose the next revision.
Diagnostic evidence
If the same feedback repeats, revise one step first instead of collecting more templates.
Identify the writing problem first
Separate task response, development, coherence, vocabulary, and grammar first. Different writing problems cannot be fixed with one template.
What to revise after checking
Add one consequence sentence after the example so it returns to the topic sentence.
Real IELTS essay diagnosis
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Main blocker
Body paragraph role is unclear
6–7conservative band range
268 words
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
FAQ
What problem does Chinese general examples solve?
The issue is usually not a missing model essay; it is not yet seeing why your own essay keeps being called unclear.
What evidence should I check first for Chinese general examples?
If the same feedback repeats, revise one step first instead of collecting more templates.
What should I redo after reading Chinese general examples?
Separate task response, development, coherence, vocabulary, and grammar first. Different writing problems cannot be fixed with one template. A story follows for example, but it does not explain why the story proves the claim.
Is Chinese general examples an AI essay checker?
Banfen Writing focuses on targeted score-gap repair. Use a real essay to pinpoint your conservative band range, core blockers, text evidence, and next revision steps.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Chinese AI checker
使用雅思写作 AI 批改时，不要只看 band、错误清单或自动生成的范文。检查器应基于题目与原文，判断 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响目标分的主卡分点，引用对应句段，并给出下一版可验证的重写步骤；结果是学习诊断，不是官方 IELTS 分数。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Task 2 examples
Task 2 的例子要和 claim、reason、consequence 连在一起，才能支撑论证。
Idea development
IELTS Task 2 idea development 的卡点不是没有观点，而是 topic sentence 后缺少 reason、example 或 consequence。检查观点如何被解释、例子为何能证明它，以及结果怎样回扣题目。定位最薄弱的一环后，只重写段落并对照证据，验证展开是否从泛泛陈述变成完整论证。
Globalisation broad example
示范 IELTS Task 2 globalisation 作文为什么例子太泛，以及如何把文化影响写成可证明链条。
Chinese Task 2 examples
雅思大作文例子要连接 reason 和 consequence，避免只列名人、国家或个人经历。
Family essay
雅思大作文家庭类作文要处理家长教育、儿童行为、学校责任和社会影响之间的关系。
Globalisation essay
雅思大作文全球化类作文要分析品牌、文化、贸易、旅游和本地社区之间的利弊关系。
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