Draft risk
Traffic, housing, and pollution all appear, but none is explained to a result.
- Whether the problem is narrowed
- Whether the affected group is clear
- Whether consequence has a causal chain
Common writing problem
When the urbanisation problem is too general, the essay becomes a list of city disadvantages.
This is not a Band 9 model essay. First, see why this Task 2 draft type gets stuck and which writing step the next version should repair.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Diagnostic evidence
The revision target is one pressure and one affected group.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether the topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the thinnest sentence into a provable cause-effect or comparison chain.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Urbanisation topic
IELTS Task 2 urbanisation topic 容易泛写 big cities。先诊断人口迁移、住房、就业和公共服务压力。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Rural to urban migration
农村到城市迁移题要诊断工作机会、公共服务和农村地区影响，不要只写 people move to cities。检查重点：迁移动机是否明确、城市压力是否具体、农村影响是否出现。
Children advertising unclear cause
儿童广告作文常说广告有害但没有解释说服机制。先诊断年龄、产品和购买压力。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
AI jobs absolute example
AI 就业作文常把技术影响写成绝对替代。先诊断职业群体、技能变化和再培训机制。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Climate responsibility blur
示范 climate change essay 为什么 government 和 individuals 混写会削弱 Task Response。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
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