Main blocker
Coherence and Task Response are both affected because the two paragraphs do not share a standard.
Common writing problem
Weak tourism comparison usually means there is no shared judgement standard.
Sample issue: Body 1 writes about jobs and Body 2 writes about culture loss, but no standard decides whether tourism should grow.
This is a representative writing problem, not a learner case or an official IELTS score.
Evidence signal
The conclusion says both sides are important but gives no final judgement.
Next revision target
Rewrite both body paragraphs around quality of life: income, housing, and local culture.
What to revise after checking
Rewrite the first sentence of each paragraph so both contain the same comparison word.
- Whether the two paragraphs share a standard
- Whether the conclusion makes a judgement
- Whether examples support the comparison
FAQ
What problem does Tourism weak comparison solve?
Sample issue: Body 1 writes about jobs and Body 2 writes about culture loss, but no standard decides whether tourism should grow.
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Guides
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Tourism topic
IELTS Task 2 tourism topic 常在 jobs 和 culture 之间摇摆。先诊断比较标准和因果链。
Tourism local culture
Tourism and local culture 题目容易写成两边都有道理。先诊断收益对象、文化损耗和最终标准。
Coherence
IELTS Coherence and Cohesion 不只是 linking words。更重要的是观点顺序、段落职责、句子推进和指代是否清楚。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Traffic solution no actor
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Transport no mechanism
示范 transport essay 只写政府多投资为什么不够，以及如何补上通勤行为变化。
Urbanisation vague problem
示范 urbanisation essay 把城市问题写成清单时，如何缩小到住房或公共服务压力。
Start diagnosis
Diagnose the comparison standard first.
Submit one tourism essay and find the main blocker in comparison, coherence, or position.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
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