Main blocker
Coherence and Task Response are both affected because the two paragraphs do not share a standard.
Common writing problem
Weak tourism comparison usually means there is no shared judgement standard.
Sample issue: Body 1 writes about jobs and Body 2 writes about culture loss, but no standard decides whether tourism should grow.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Evidence signal
The conclusion says both sides are important but gives no final judgement.
Next revision target
Rewrite both body paragraphs around quality of life: income, housing, and local culture.
What to revise after checking
Rewrite the first sentence of each paragraph so both contain the same comparison word.
- Whether the two paragraphs share a standard
- Whether the conclusion makes a judgement
- Whether examples support the comparison
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Tourism topic
IELTS Task 2 tourism topic 常在 jobs 和 culture 之间摇摆。先诊断比较标准和因果链。如果正文没有说明就业、环境或文化哪一个优先，立场会弱。
Tourism local culture
Tourism and local culture 题目容易写成两边都有道理。先诊断收益对象、文化损耗和最终标准。检查重点：文化损耗是否具体、收益对象是否明确、判断标准是否一致。
Coherence
IELTS Coherence and Cohesion 的范围比 linking words 大得多。更重要的是观点顺序、段落职责、句子推进和指代是否清楚。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Traffic solution no actor
交通拥堵方案段常列措施但没有主体。先诊断谁执行、如何改变行为、结果是什么。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Transport no mechanism
示范 transport essay 只写政府多投资为什么不够，以及如何补上通勤行为变化。检查重点：服务改善是否具体、通勤者是否改变选择、拥堵结果是否可解释。
Urbanisation vague problem
示范 urbanisation essay 把城市问题写成清单时，如何缩小到住房或公共服务压力。检查重点：问题是否缩小、受影响群体是否明确、后果是否有因果链。
Start practising
Diagnose the comparison standard first.
Submit one tourism essay and find the main blocker in comparison, coherence, or position.
References