Draft risk
The prompt asks about school funding, but the example only says students are healthier and never returns to learning result.
- Whether the example matches the prompt goal
- Whether education result appears
- Whether the topic sentence is proven
Common writing problem
When a sports example does not support the claim, the paragraph jumps from education to health.
This is not a Band 9 model essay. First, see why this Task 2 draft type gets stuck and which writing step the next version should repair.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Diagnostic evidence
The revision target is connecting physical activity to discipline, focus, or teamwork.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether the topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the thinnest sentence into a provable cause-effect or comparison chain.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Sports topic
IELTS Task 2 sports topic 常把 health、school、money 混在一起。先诊断目标、受益人和例子支撑。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Sports funding schools
学校体育经费题要诊断教育目标、学生行为和预算取舍，而不是只写运动有益健康。如果主体段没有 classroom、discipline 或 teamwork，教育价值没有落地。
Technology unclear position
一个 technology essay 常见写作问题：当文章一边支持效率、一边担心失业时，先找立场和段落职责问题。Clear position 时好时坏：每段都像在回答不同问题。
Tourism weak comparison
这份 IELTS Task 2 tourism 常见写作问题 展示作文写到 jobs 和 culture loss，却因缺少共同标准而无法判断 benefits 是否超过 drawbacks。查看原文证据、主卡分点和目标段落，学习补上比较尺度、权重与结论，再把方法用于自己的旅游类作文重写；它只是代表性问题说明。
Traffic solution no actor
交通拥堵方案段常列措施但没有主体。先诊断谁执行、如何改变行为、结果是什么。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
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