Diagnostic evidence
The revision target is choosing one comparison standard and using it throughout the essay.
Common writing problem
When money-topic position drifts, the issue is not too few ideas but too many standards.
This is not a Band 9 model essay. First, see why this Task 2 draft type gets stuck and which writing step the next version should repair.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Draft risk
One paragraph supports money by security, another rejects it by family, and the conclusion says balance, so the answer becomes unclear.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the thinnest sentence into a provable cause-effect or comparison chain.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether the topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
- Whether the comparison standard is fixed
- Whether each paragraph serves the same answer
- Whether the conclusion changes the position
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Money topic
IELTS Task 2 money topic 容易从 happiness 写到 success 再写到 consumerism。先诊断立场和比较标准。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Money happiness debate
金钱和幸福题最容易立场漂移。先诊断 security、choice、relationship 等比较标准。先说钱重要，后说亲情更重要，最后又说都重要，全文没有稳定答案。
Privacy example vague
Online privacy example vague 示例诊断例子没有数据类型、风险路径和责任主体的问题。如果例子换到任何科技题都能用，它通常太泛，不能证明隐私观点。
Opinion essay unbalanced
Opinion essay unbalanced 示例诊断立场漂移、反方处理过重和 conclusion 无法收束的问题。带着自己的原文逐项检查，再用一次有目标的重写验证判断。
Recycling law no mechanism
Recycling law no mechanism 示例诊断 solution 只有口号、缺少执行主体和行为改变路径的问题。带着自己的原文逐项检查，再用一次有目标的重写验证判断。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
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