Revision target
Change it to limited regulation: target fraud and child risk while protecting political expression.
Common writing problem
Governments should not limit the internet because freedom is important; however, all harmful content must be removed.
This draft type may seem to have ideas while lacking diagnostic evidence. Diagnose the writing step first instead of looking for a model essay to memorise.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Draft risk
The position conflicts: not limit and all harmful content removed need a boundary for regulation.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the sentence that most affects meaning into a provable cause-effect, comparison, or trade-off chain.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
- Limit the regulated target
- Explain the freedom cost
- Replace all with high-risk content
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Media topic
IELTS Task 2 media topic 容易泛写 influence。先诊断信息来源、受众和行为改变。这个观点太大，无法说明是改变消费、观点、学习还是投票。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Government internet control
政府监管互联网题要诊断 public safety、free speech、misinformation 和 enforcement limits。
Government topic
IELTS Task 2 government topic 容易写成 government should do more。先诊断政策目标、预算取舍和结果链。
Money position drift
示范 money and happiness 作文为什么从安全感写到成功再写到道德，导致立场不稳定。重写目标是选择一个 comparison standard 并贯穿全文。
Privacy example vague
Online privacy example vague 示例诊断例子没有数据类型、风险路径和责任主体的问题。如果例子换到任何科技题都能用，它通常太泛，不能证明隐私观点。
Opinion essay unbalanced
Opinion essay unbalanced 示例诊断立场漂移、反方处理过重和 conclusion 无法收束的问题。带着自己的原文逐项检查，再用一次有目标的重写验证判断。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
References