Draft risk
If the example only says people watch foreign movies without who, why, and changed behaviour, Task Response is weak.
- Whether the actor is specific
- Whether cultural behaviour changes
- Whether the result proves the topic sentence
Common writing problem
When a globalisation example is too broad, the paragraph has material but no evidence.
This is not a Band 9 model essay. First, see why this Task 2 draft type gets stuck and which writing step the next version should repair.
This illustrates a common writing problem for study; official IELTS scores come only from the test.
Diagnostic evidence
The revision target is actor -> habit change -> cultural result.
Find where the chain breaks first
Check whether the topic sentence, reason, example, and consequence serve the same answer.
Repair one step in the rewrite
Repair one paragraph first. Turn the thinnest sentence into a provable cause-effect or comparison chain.
Guides
Keep going with these guides.
These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，分数之外还要看主卡分点。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Globalisation topic
IELTS Task 2 globalisation topic 容易写成世界变小了。先诊断文化、经济和个人选择之间的影响链。先诊断题目角度，再决定例子。
Idea development
有 idea 不一定有结果：Task 2 主体段要把观点写成解释、例子和结果。按 claim→reason→example 查断点，再把最空的一句改成可评分论证。
Globalisation local traditions
全球化和本地传统题容易只写 tradition is important。先诊断影响对象、文化行为和段落展开。问自己：谁的传统、被什么影响、具体行为如何改变。
Internet control position conflict
互联网监管作文容易同时支持自由和全面监管。先诊断边界、对象和权利成本。这类草稿看似有观点，却缺少诊断证据。先诊断写作步骤，不要先找可背范文。
Money position drift
示范 money and happiness 作文为什么从安全感写到成功再写到道德，导致立场不稳定。重写目标是选择一个 comparison standard 并贯穿全文。
Privacy example vague
Online privacy example vague 示例诊断例子没有数据类型、风险路径和责任主体的问题。如果例子换到任何科技题都能用，它通常太泛，不能证明隐私观点。
Start practising
Diagnose whether your draft has this blocker too.
Submit one Task 2 essay and let diagnosis locate one main blocker first.
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