Next revision target
revise only one body paragraph: connect poorer students -> admission access -> degree completion -> job mobility in four steps.
Common writing problem
This education paragraph is not missing advanced vocabulary; it is missing an explanation chain.
Sample issue: the claim says free university helps poorer students, but the support only repeats that education brings opportunities. The diagnosis is missing reason and consequence.
This is a representative writing problem, not a learner case or an official IELTS score.
Main blocker
Development is thin: the mechanism between claim and result is missing.
Evidence signal
The same idea is rephrased three times, but it does not answer how access changes the student's future.
What to revise after checking
Label each sentence as claim, reason, example, or consequence. When two claims appear in a row, turn the second into a reason.
- Whether the paragraph only repeats the claim
- Whether the mechanism is explained
- Whether the revision target fixes one paragraph
FAQ
What problem does Education thin development solve?
Sample issue: the claim says free university helps poorer students, but the support only repeats that education brings opportunities. The diagnosis is missing reason and consequence.
What evidence should I check first for Education thin development?
Development is thin: the mechanism between claim and result is missing.
What should I redo after reading Education thin development?
The same idea is rephrased three times, but it does not answer how access changes the student's future. Label each sentence as claim, reason, example, or consequence. When two claims appear in a row, turn the second into a reason.
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Education topic
IELTS Task 2 education topic 常见问题不是没观点，而是 reason、example 和 consequence 没有连成可评分的论证。
Free university education
Free university education 题目容易只写公平。先诊断 taxpayer cost、access 和 long-term return 是否服务同一个立场。
Idea development
IELTS Task 2 idea development 的卡点不是没有观点，而是 topic sentence 后缺少 reason、example 或 consequence。检查观点如何被解释、例子为何能证明它，以及结果怎样回扣题目。定位最薄弱的一环后，只重写段落并对照证据，验证展开是否从泛泛陈述变成完整论证。
Writing checker
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Full sample report
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