Diagnostic evidence: no role change
If parents and children do not change behaviour, the paragraph is usually only a value judgement.
Task 2 topic guide
Family essays need changing roles, not only family is important.
Family prompts often involve parental responsibility, child independence, elderly care, and working hours. Love and support is safe but hard to develop.
Write the role first, then the impact.
Risk: relationship is too vague
Parents should guide children is hard to prove without a specific decision.
What to revise after checking
Rewrite one topic sentence so it includes role, decision, and consequence.
Real IELTS essay diagnosis
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Main blocker
Body paragraph role is unclear
6–7conservative band range
268 words
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
How to break down family topics
First decide whether the prompt asks about responsibility, independence, care, or work-life balance. Each type has different roles.
- Whether the role is specific
- Whether behaviour changes
- Whether the impact returns to the prompt
FAQ
What problem does Family topic solve?
Family prompts often involve parental responsibility, child independence, elderly care, and working hours. Love and support is safe but hard to develop.
What evidence should I check first for Family topic?
Parents should guide children is hard to prove without a specific decision.
What should I redo after reading Family topic?
Rewrite one topic sentence so it includes role, decision, and consequence. First decide whether the prompt asks about responsibility, independence, care, or work-life balance. Each type has different roles.
Is Family topic an AI essay checker?
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Guides
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These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Children topic
IELTS Task 2 children topic 常把 children 写得太大。先诊断年龄段、责任主体和行为变化。
Task 2 examples
Task 2 的例子要和 claim、reason、consequence 连在一起，才能支撑论证。
Coherence
IELTS Coherence and Cohesion 不只是 linking words。更重要的是观点顺序、段落职责、句子推进和指代是否清楚。
Food topic
IELTS Task 2 food topic 常在 fast food、local food、health 和 culture 之间跳。先诊断题目角度。
Globalisation topic
IELTS Task 2 globalisation topic 容易写成世界变小了。先诊断文化、经济和个人选择之间的影响链。
Government topic
IELTS Task 2 government topic 容易写成 government should do more。先诊断政策目标、预算取舍和结果链。
Start diagnosis
Check role change in a family essay first.
Submit one family-topic essay and find the main blocker in roles, examples, or causality.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
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