Pre-draft outline check
First define age group, platform use, adult control, and result. Do not start by memorising psychological harm.
Task 2 question
For social media and children, make children specific first.
A common issue is treating children as one group and jumping to addiction, poor grades, or weak communication. Without an age group and use case, the argument stays thin.
The more specific the group, the easier the example supports the claim.
Common trap
Treating all social media as danger can miss whether the prompt asks about education, friendship, or parental control.
Diagnostic evidence
If the example could fit any technology essay, it has not answered the children part of the prompt.
Real IELTS essay diagnosis
First of all, technology saves a lot of time in our daily life. For example, when we go to a new place, we do not need to ask people or remember the way, we just use the map App on the phone. Besides, we can pay by phone, buy things online and talk with friend…
Marked line: where the diagnosis located the main blocker in this learner-written essay.Coherence & cohesion 6
Main blocker
Body paragraph role is unclear
6–7conservative band range
268 words
Sample diagnostic, not an official IELTS score.
What to revise after checking
Replace children with a specific group, such as primary school students or teenagers preparing exams, then rewrite one consequence paragraph.
- Whether the age group is clear
- Whether platform use is specific
- Whether the consequence connects to the prompt
FAQ
What problem does Social media children solve?
A common issue is treating children as one group and jumping to addiction, poor grades, or weak communication. Without an age group and use case, the argument stays thin.
What evidence should I check first for Social media children?
Treating all social media as danger can miss whether the prompt asks about education, friendship, or parental control.
What should I redo after reading Social media children?
If the example could fit any technology essay, it has not answered the children part of the prompt. Replace children with a specific group, such as primary school students or teenagers preparing exams, then rewrite one consequence paragraph.
Is Social media children an AI essay checker?
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Guides
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These pages explain the Banfen Writing diagnostic and blocker-repair method, Task 1 overview, Task 2 development, and common score blockers.
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Technology topic
IELTS Task 2 technology topic 容易写成泛泛的 modern life。先诊断立场、对象和例子是否贴题。
Education topic
IELTS Task 2 education topic 常见问题不是没观点，而是 reason、example 和 consequence 没有连成可评分的论证。
Task 2 examples
Task 2 的例子要和 claim、reason、consequence 连在一起，才能支撑论证。
Writing checker
使用 IELTS Writing checker 时，不要只看一个分数。更有用的是找出 Task Response、Coherence、Lexical Resource 或 Grammar 中最影响训练的主卡分点。
Space exploration spending
太空探索经费题要诊断科学收益、机会成本和公共资金理由。
Sports funding schools
学校体育经费题要诊断教育目标、学生行为和预算取舍，而不是只写运动有益健康。
Technology face-to-face communication
科技和面对面沟通题要诊断 relationship type、communication quality 和 convenience trade-off。
Start diagnosis
Check whether children are specific enough first.
Submit one social media and children essay and find the main blocker in group definition, examples, or causality.
More than a simple comment list. Identify the priority blocker in your draft and guide you to revise with proven results.
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